This essay focuses on a more productive living.
characteristics and achieving the goal.
E1
Explain/ Expand Reason 1: Being aware of values is essentia
Title: Type the title of your essay here
T
Hook: Question
Topic/ Thesis: How a person’s value helps them achieve something, make them a better person of themselves, and how being aware of it creates a more productive living
R1
Reason 1: Awareness is essential at which a person is being guided with building up their characteristics and achieving the goal.
E1
Explain/ Expand Reason 1: Being aware of values is essential.
R2
Reason 2: It helps a person to build up their goals and gain a sense of responsibility towards their actions.
E2
Explain/ Expand Reason 2: As people grow up, a person is trained and embedded with values.
R3
Reason 2: Introducing the values toward the work environment is a vital factor toward efficiency and productivity
E3
Explain/ Expand Reason 2: A sense of accomplishment at work is achievable if one understands and knows how to work with other people with excellent relations.
E
Ending: Values are essential to a person in building up themselves most notably in their work field
Final Message: Everyone must be aware of the correct principles that should be instilled in them as they grow up.
Daowei He
ESL 100
10/11/2021
Values in your daily life
Does a person necessarily need values in life to achieve what they want and overcome some challenges? [1] When it comes to life, it is said t[2] hat knowing the values and attitude of a person helps everyone to live freely and co-exist with other people. Values are attainable as a person grows up.
good and better decisions in life; either having the importance of being honest, responsible, or accountable to every action that a person does, shows a significant development in their values in life[3] . It[4] is also acting as a reflection of oneself so that others judge a person through being observed with their actions[5] [6] .
Knowing the roots of the word “Kuleana” reminds people[7] of their life’s calling and moral values. It started with a god named Ku, who marries and has children. He dies to save his family and town from starvation. The story ends in doubt[8] . What is one’s life’s calling? “Kuleana” clarifies one’s values (Aipa, 2015). It is excellent if one wholly owns their activities.[9] To contribute to others’ lives, one must first contribute to his own. Believing in oneself and fighting for justice can be a person’sis “kuleana.” It is up to each person to find their life’s calling. Rather than waiting for it to happen, the person will act.[10] With time, the person will become ordinary[11] and vital to a better life.
with a question in this class (or in college, for that matter)
who says this? In an academic paper, you must never use passive voice to avoid citing a source
revise for clarity
what is this pronoun’s antecedent?
unclear
You need to be specific- when you try to write sentence with no real subject like this, the reader gets lost.
which people? Kuleana is a very specific term for a specific group of people
I think there it little doubt at the end of the story, actually
??
what person? article error and verb tense error
??